1) Brooks did a very good job of showing his reader that although he was ready to enter into a new environment, he had animosity for what would lie ahead of him.
2) By using the personal I, he showed his reader that what he was writing were direct experiences, which gave the reader more personal connection to the piece.
3) Brooks did an excellent job of transitioning the piece from one major topic of entering college to moving off campus.
3 Weaknesses:
1) There were some small errors where one word similar to what it appeared he meant was in place of what I feel he could have meant. This made few but some sections awkward.
2) Although it helped the piece as a whole, I did not feel that plans for the future were necessary in him speaking of his journey so far at Eckerd.
3) While developing his piece, I feel that he foreshadowed a small amount to much of fear that he had for how his social life would turn out.
Revision Plan:
Because his strengths far outweighed his weaknesses, I feel that the largest area that needs to be improved upon is simply him going back and finding where word choice made the piece awkward at points. Beyond that, the piece was able to be intriguing for me, the reader while also telling his story and because of that, I feel that little else is needing of being improved upon.
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